Angel of Death

I saw some problems that I think need to be addressed. 1. Put spaces between the periods.Don't have your sentences looking bunched together like this one does. 2. When someone ...

Welcome to YWS Twilight, cool name by the way, I love the Twilight series as well. Pink and Black are the best colors in the world!! I love books with ...

Two great romance novels that I would suggest because they are two of my favorites are Pride and Prejudice by Jane Austen and Jane Eyre by Charlotte Bronte

I really love this, you are very artistic. I liked how you chose to style this poem this was beautiful, good job!!

Hey Heatherish!! I am so happy that you finally decided to post another chapter of Lavender Rose. I love Lukas's change of emotion. He acted like a boy with his ...

Oh my gosh this is so beautiful and sad you made me cry. Great job!!

Sweetest Goodbye Verse 1 Box of chocolates on my bed A bouquet of roses the darkest red Turn into reminders of your lips Your eyes, your soul, the way you ...

I liked this. I think maybe you should add more though. Keep writing and good luck!!

I loved this! Did you ever think about turning this into a book? If you did this would be so great...its fantastic now but I love your characters. This was ...

This was really good.

I love writing poems, I'm up for the challenge!

This was so beautiful, I love the way you separated the paragraphs with sentences and how it ended...It's life. True brilliance!!!

You should put Raven's thoughts in italics and separate them from the paragraphs. I like how you don't just rush into things...keep writing.

I am half way through this. Lovely improvements, can't wait to read more. :D

Thanks KJ I appreciate the critique...I'll surely fix this.